Friday, September 23, 2011

Memories.


Birthplace, a memoir.

prologue :

My birth paper says, young Jim is a male, apparently I was - hearty and hale.
Very soon after, my family drifted away - to another town, for just a short stay.
Life in the depression: my ensuing years, were a very long session.
Now, Jim is a contraction of a much bigger name.
Perhaps, the two my folks chose they thought would bring fame.
Well, it never happened. I don’t really care.
They’ve all served me well, no need for despair.
**
memories :
Time came for needing to visit this town
where I was born during a depressions frown –
so  I,
wandered ‘round Woodstock a few years in the past,
it didn’t bring memories, but it sure was a blast.
You see, I was too young to remember those days,
some are just figments, most are a - recounted haze.

A small Private Hospital in the town of Woodstock.
I stood quiet on the footpath after walking the block,
up from the station, yes there once was a train.
Maybe it moaned as they both took the strain.

The train does not run now. It’s probably lost and forlorn
in some rusty ol’ rail shed, it’s whistle long gorn,
but the footpath’s still dusty and perhaps in a fleet
 -  of a moment  -
I saw the impressions of
my parents feet.

© Rimeriter.
memoir 3/9/11.

Writers' Warning.



Extracted from the Internet 16/9/11.
New Authors Beware!

It has come to our attention that there are a lot of new authors getting burnt out there by self-publishing houses and vanity publishers.
So this article is to help you be aware of a few pitfalls out there.


There are two general rules to keep in mind when it comes to choosing how to publish your book:


1. If it’s too good to be true, it probably is!


2. You pay peanuts, you get monkeys.


On point #1, you probably have submitted your manuscript to a ‘publishing house’ in the USA.  You receive a response from them. You’re accepted! They’ll flatter you and tell you how good  your book is and how they believe it will be a success in the marketplace.


Wow! A publishing house wants to publish your book. But wait. You have to pay $9,000 to get your book published. But of course that is to cover costs for the publisher and to print some books. In your elation, you pay the $9,000.


Later on, you read the contract carefully, you realise not only lost your copyright, you are getting paid a mere 10% royalty. Common sense starts entering your head and you Google them on the internet.
You realise that there are hundreds of other people who are in the same boat and lost their savings!
These are called vanity publishers. They are not real publishers!
Writer Beware, http://accrispin.blogspot.com/, an industry watchdog gives two big "thumbs down" .

Note: use the link above.

Bush Burden.


Our country compatriots have been doin' it tough, some still are, a few have found it too much and given in -

Just over the fence or through the gate,
by the sliprail – it’s getting’ late –
makin’ for  that furthest hill.

Some green grass but most is brown,
the sheep are movin’ bit further down
past the tree to the nearby rill.

Water in dam but we need more rain
to ease the sufferin’, ease the pain
cos the bank wont pay the feedin’ bill.

Night is nearin’ with mist on the rise,
light grey cloud is coverin’ the skies,
I should keep goin’
but I’ve

lost
the

will.

©.Rimeriter. 14/7/11.

Saturday, September 03, 2011

Interesting Info. For Writers.


Obviously, I found this via the internet.
It makes interesting reading for writers -

HOW TO RAISE YOUR CHARACTERS ABOVE THE STATUS QUO                                        Page 1 of 7.
August 30, 2011 | Brian A. Klems |

You’ve sweated over your manuscript, crafted your characters, honed your story line, and rooted your novel in a location organic to and inseparable from your plot. Now, as you begin tweaking and revising your story, it’s the perfect time to take a closer look at the depth and dimensionality of your characters.
One of the most effective ways of doing this is one most writers have never even heard of: managing status.
I first learned about status years ago while studying physical comedy, mime and improvisation. I remember listening to acting instructor Keith Johnstone (author of IMPRO and Impro for Storytellers) explain how dominance and submission affect actors on stage and how stillness raises status. As he spoke, I kept thinking of how essential it is for writers to capture the same characterizations on the page.Since then, I’ve been on the lookout for ways to fine-tune the status of my characters. Here are four essential principles I’ve discovered.
1. VARIABLE STATUS IS THE KEY TO DIMENSIONALITY.
So what exactly is status?
Simply put, in every social interaction, one person has (or attempts to have) more of a dominant role. Those in authority or those who want to exert authority use a collection of verbal and nonverbal cues to gain and maintain higher status. But it’s not just authority figures who do this. In daily life all of us are constantly adjusting and negotiating the amount of status we portray as we face different situations and interact with different people. Novelists have the daunting task of showing this dynamic of shifting submission and dominance through dialogue, posture, pauses, communication patterns, body language, action and inner dialogue. To do so, you’ll need to recognize some basic status cues:
Dominant individuals exude confidence through a relaxed demeanor and loose gestures and gait; submissive people constrict their stride, voice, posture, gestures.
Looking down, crossing your legs, biting your lip and holding your hands in front of your face are all ways of hiding. Concealment lowers status.
Eye contact is a powerful way of maintaining dominance. Cultures differ, but North Americans prolong eye contact to intimidate, control, threaten or seduce.
Stillness is power. Dominant people delay before replying to questions not because they can’t think of anything to say, but to control the conversation. They blink less frequently than submissive people and keep their heads still as they speak. The more fidgety, bedraggled or frazzled a person is, the less status he has.
Submissive people apologize and agree more than dominant ones. They try to please and are easily intimidated. To act as if you need something lowers your status; telling someone they can be helpful to you raises it.
Effective negotiators mirror the status of the people with whom they’re doing business. This way they neither appear too aggressive (intimidatingly high status) or too willing to compromise (unimpressively low status).
Status varies with respect to three things: relationship (a father has higher relational status than his 8-year-old), position (a boss has higher positional status than her employees) and situation (if you’re attacked by a team of ninjas and you’ve never studied martial arts, you’d have significantly lower situational status than your assailants).
Although the level of relational, positional and situational status might be out of our hands, our response to it is not. The daughter might manipulate her father, the employee might quit, and you might summon up enough moxie to frighten off those ninjas. So, in determining status, choices matter more than circumstances.When readers complain that a character is one-dimensional, flat or “cardboard,” they may not realize it, but they’re actually noting that the character—regardless of the social context in which she appears—always has the same degree of status.
She might always be angry or ruthless or heroic, but the more uniformly she responds to everyone and everything, the less interesting she’ll be.
People in real life are complex. Fictional characters need to be, as well.
So what’s the key to a well-rounded character? Simple: She doesn’t have the same status in every situation.
Each supporting cast member is in the story to bring out different traits of the main characters. Dimensionality, depth and complexity are all brought out by showing subtle shifts in your character’s status as he interacts with the other players.
In my novels featuring FBI Special Agent Patrick Bowers, I’m careful not to let him appear weak or cowardly: I want readers to respect and admire him. Whenever he’s at a crime scene or standing up to a bad guy, he has the highest status. He’ll never back down, never give in, never give up.
But to have dimensionality he also needs relationships in which he has low status. So, as a single dad he struggles with knowing how to handle his sharp-witted and surly teenage daughter, and, lacking some social graces, he fumbles for the right things to say to women he’s attracted to. Without his daughter or a love interest to reveal those low status aspects of his characterization, he’d be one-dimensional, and certainly not engaging enough to build a series around.
If you want readers to invest in your protagonist, you’ll need to find areas where he has a weakness, low status or something to overcome. Remember, even Indiana Jones is afraid of snakes, and Superman is vulnerable to Kryptonite.
2. WORD CHOICE DETERMINES CHARACTERIZATION.
In theater the phrase “stealing the scene” refers to instances in which another person upstages the star. Actually, it’s just another way of saying that the star (or protagonist) no longer has the highest status.
When this happens on stage, it will annoy the star. When it happens in your novel, it’ll turn off your readers.And you can shatter hundreds of pages of careful characterization with one poorly chosen word.
A person with high status might shout, holler, call or yell, but if she screams, screeches, bawls or squeals, her status is lowered. Similarly, a character who quivers, trembles, whines or pleads has lower status than one who tries to control the pain. For example:
1. Adrian drew the blade across Sylvia’s arm. She shrieked and begged him to stop.
2. Adrian drew the blade across Sylvia’s arm. She clenched her teeth, refused to give him the satisfaction of seeing her cry.
In the first example, Sylvia’s uncontrolled reaction lowers her status beneath that of her assailant. In the second, however, her resolve raises her status above that of Adrian, who has evidently failed to intimidate her.
Rather than appearing victimized, she has become heroic.
Your protagonist must never act in a way that lowers her status below that of the antagonist.
Take a moment to let that sink in.
You might find it helpful to imagine high-status movie stars playing your protagonist. I’m not sure about you, but I have a hard time imagining Liam Neeson, Jason Statham or Bruce Willis pleading for mercy or screaming for help.
Remember, choices determine status. So, while revising, continually ask yourself what you want readers to feel about each character. Do you want them to be on this character’s side? To cheer for him? Fear, despise or discount him? Every action, every word of dialogue, every gesture—even every speaker attribution—communicates a certain status, so be sure the words you choose support the impression you’re trying to make. If Betty stomps across the floor (showing lack of self-control) or struts across it (implying the need for attention) she’ll have lower status than someone who strides across it (showing composure and confidence).
Even punctuation affects status:

1. “I know you heard me! Move away from Anna! If you lay a hand on her, I guarantee you will regret it!”
2. “I know you heard me. Move away from Anna. If you lay a hand on her, I guarantee you will regret it.”
In the first example, the exclamation points cause the speaker to come across as frantic or desperate. In the second, the periods show him to be controlled, measured, authoritative. That’s how a hero responds.
A wimpy protagonist isn’t interesting.
A wimpy antagonist isn’t frightening.
In marketable fiction, both heroes and villains need high status. When villains aren’t frightening or heroes aren’t inspiring, it’s usually because the author let them act in a way that undermines their status. Don’t make that mistake.
3. PROTAGONISTS NEED OPPORTUNITIES TO BE HEROIC.
When I was writing my novel The Rook, one section gave me a particularly difficult time. Agent Bowers is at the scene of a suicide when Detective Dunn, a street-smart local homicide cop, shows up. Dunn is tough. He’s used to calling the shots, to having the highest status. In this scene, he makes an aggressive, high-status move by getting in Bowers’ face and then taunting him. I struggled with showing that as bold and brash as Dunn is, my hero still has higher status. After hashing through numerous drafts, here’s how the encounter finally played out (from Bowers’ point of view):
[Dunn] stepped close enough for me to smell his garlicky breath.
“This is my city. The next time you and your pencil-pushing lawyer buddies from Quantico decide to stick your nose into an ongoing investigation, at least have the courtesy to go through the proper channels.”
“I’d suggest you back away,” I said. “Now.”
He backed up slowly.
Bowers refuses to be baited and isn’t intimidated by Dunn’s aggressive posturing. If he were, readers would lose faith in him and side with Dunn. Instead, Bowers remains calm and, by exhibiting poise and self-control, induces Dunn’s submission. (Also, by adding the speaker attribution “I said,” I inserted a slight pause in Bowers’ response, subtly adding to his status even more. To see the difference, read the sentence aloud with and without the pause.)
At the end of the scene when Dunn steps back, there’s no doubt in the mind of the reader who is in charge.
Readers will not empathize with a weak protagonist. They expect protagonists who have strength of conviction, moral courage and noble aspirations. It’s true, of course, that during the story the protagonist might be struggling to grow in these areas, but readers need to see her as someone worth cheering for along the way.
If you can spot weaknesses in your protagonist and are grappling with how to strengthen her, try one of these ways:
Have your protagonist sacrifice for the good of others. The sacrifice might be physical (stepping in front of a bullet), financial (anonymously paying another’s debt), material (volunteering for the Peace Corps) or emotional (forgiving someone for a deep offense).
Have her stand up for the oppressed. I’ve seen all too many authors try to show how “tough” their protagonist is by portraying her as cold or unfeeling—especially at a crime scene. Bad idea. Readers want the hero (or heroine) to be compassionate and life-affirming. Let’s say your female medical examiner is at a crime scene and one of the other cops gestures toward the corpse and quips, “They stab ’em; you slab ’em.” Your protagonist needs to uphold the dignity and value of human life. She might reproach the cop, or remind him of the victim’s grieving family. If you let her make light of something as precious as life itself, you’ll end up devastating her status.
Have her turn the other cheek. If someone slaps your protagonist and she looks the guy in the eye and refuses to fight back, her self-control raises her status above that of the attacker.

Strength isn’t shown only by what a person can do, but by what she could do but refrains from doing. Self-restraint always raises status.
4. STATUS CRYSTALLIZES AS THE STORY ESCALATES.
As your story builds toward its climax, the status of both your hero and your villain will also rise. The bad guy will become more and more coldhearted or unstoppable, and the good guy will need to summon unprecedented strength or courage to save the day.
Status has more to do with actions than motives, so even though the hero and villain have completely different agendas, you can raise the status of either one by giving him more 1) self-control, 2) courage and/or 3) resolve.
Remember, stillness is power, so if you decide you need to make a villain more imposing, try slowing him down. Show readers that he’s in no hurry to commit his evil deed—he has such high status that he can walk slowly and still catch the person fleeing frantically through the woods.
Villains become less frightening when they’re self-congratulatory or cocky. You actually lower a villain’s status by giving him the need to prove himself. Sadistic, chortling, hand-wringing villains aren’t nearly as unnerving as calm, relentless ones who are simply indifferent to the suffering of others.
If your story calls for multiple villains, try staggering their status levels so that the top-tier bad guy has the highest status and is therefore the most threatening and dangerous person for your protagonist to encounter at the story’s climax.
Let your protagonist enter the final showdown at a disadvantage—weaponless, injured, poisoned or exhausted from fighting his way past all the antagonist’s henchmen. An underdog who overcomes impossible odds is a hero we can believe in.
And one we will want to read about again.

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Hopefully, it was useful reading.
Jim.

Thursday, August 18, 2011

WooHoo


Some mighty words of encouragement to their members from a 'sister' Writing Group, just over the mountains -

' WooHoo!
 Rousing cheers and applause goes to local illustrator Freya Blackwood for her win today in the Children's Book Council of Australia Awards for Early Childhood Book of the Year! 
Freya won for her illustrations in the book Maudie and Bear written by Jan Ormerod.
The two honour books in the Early Childhood section were The Tall Man and Twelve Babies by Tom Niland Champion and Kilmeny Niland with illustrations by Deborah Niland; and Look See, Look at Me by Leonie Norrington and illustrated by Dee Huxley.
We have the shortlisted books on display at Orange City Library and you can also check out book reviews by the Library team who have enjoyed reading the shortlisted books over the past month.
 Way to go Freya! '

Wednesday, August 17, 2011

UK Publisher.

Lucky me, my poem - Tibooburra, when it's hot - has been selected for inclusion in Everflowing Ink, a special edition soft back scheduled for publication 31st October this year.

The following is an excerpt from the website -
' Forward Poetry's ethos has always been to act as a bridge to publication rather than a barrier. 
This, along with our passion for poetry and creative writing, has seen a humble family business evolve into the biggest publisher of new poetry in the world. 
We understand that poetry is subjective, that everyone writes in a different style and that what one person can love, another can hate! 
Our collections showcase a variety of themes, writing styles and poets from all walks of life. 
They are carefully edited and compiled to celebrate and complement the craft that all of our contributors enjoy poetry.'


Should members need to investigate potential publication, use these details -

Email: inbox@forwardpoetry.co.uk. Office hours: 8am to 5pm Monday to Friday Remus House, Coltsfoot Drive, Peterborough, Cambridgeshire, PE2 9BF ...
www.forwardpoetry.co.uk

"Happy Hunting"
Jim.

Tuesday, August 02, 2011

Poddy Rider.


He'd set his sights on victory. Nothing was going to hold him back.
11-year old Ryan Fogarty from Anningie station went to the Harts Range rodeo (out around the Alice) over the weekend determined to become the 2011 poddy ride champion.
Say G'day to Ryan -

Poddy Rider.
 Anningie Station.
Now - young Ryan Fogarty is only eleven years old,
he sure has joined, the brave and the bold
by riding a calf, alone and not held,
his poddy riding prowess into history - will meld.
His style is just classical - and is sure smiled upon,
‘put left in the rope, right hand up, slope forward - hold on’
then cling like the devil to the poddy calfs back
for a second or more – of courage - no lack.

First prize is a buckle, which young Ryan has won,
riding a small bucking beast  on a day in the sun.
The sun shines on champions, that’s fact and it’s true,
he stuck to his task like sitting in glue,
squeezing his legs, listening to Dad,
prepared to be led
‘hold him real hard son,  and follow his head’.

Ryan intends to buy a big belt
for wearing his
Prize Buckle
here, there,
- everywhere -
so his friends and neighbours
- everyone -
will stop, stand and just stare.
So will
 Cameron Smith,
that famous bull rider,
maybe one day
 Ryan
will be his offsider.
©.Rimeriter. 2/8/11.
NB: sent by ABC Inmail.

Tuesday, July 26, 2011

Irish Pub.

Donnybrook Hotel.

They’d meet by flickering firelight in an Irishmans hotel
enjoy some finest whisky and very fine food as well
but often tempers rise up, as they would dance and play
just saying  “good evenin” could cause an all in one affray.

A frenzied fracas might ensue if the tone was quiet and wry
especially if a stranger caught a keen young colleens eye
took her to the parlour where he’d steal a fervent kiss
to a wild and riotous Irishman this was definitely amiss.

Fey leprechauns and fireflies would in the dark, appear
to keep an unfriendly stranger from coming much to near
they’d dance upon the toadstools and the velvet black of night 
and not go to the garden, there to steal a fervent kiss
from a wild young Irish colleen that could fill his life with bliss.

But then the total stranger did eagerly declare -
I have no need for colleens. I only need your fare.
I must drink and dine with kinship that take me to their breast.
I must full enjoy companionship, before I travel further west. 
My heart is, with the green of Ireland and in its stoney shores,
it dwells in old Killarney where my soul it still implores.

But Nay! they would have none of it, the leprechauns agreed.
They led him to the front step and wished him all good speed
whilst fireflies lit the pathway, to guide his wavering feet
that stumbled slowly down the path, albeit not too fleet.

Because he’d spied that Irish colleen, with fiery blood red hair,
waiting in the shadows with just enough time to spare, 
for only one more fleeting kiss and a touch of derring-dare.

©.Rimeriter.
31/3/04.


This ol' Pub exists near Lithgow in NSW.
The Portland Poet would know it well.

Friday, July 15, 2011

Masters Hand.

'Twas battered and scarred, and the auctioneer
Thought it scarcely worth his while
To waste much time on the old violin,
But held it up with a smile.
"What am I bidden, good folks," he cried,
"Who'll start the bidding for me?"
"A dollar, a dollar;" then, "Two!" "Only two?
Two dollars, and who'll make it three?"
"Three dollars, once; three dollars, twice;
Going for three…" But no,
From the room, far back, a grey-haired man
Came forward and picked up the bow;
Then, wiping the dust from the old violin,
And tightening the loosened strings,
He played a melody pure and sweet,
As a caroling angel sings.

The music ceased, and the auctioneer,
With a voice that was quiet and low,
Said: "What am I bid for the old violin?"
And he held it up with the bow.
"A thousand dollars, and who'll make it two?
Two thousand! And who'll make it three?
Three thousand, once; three thousand, twice,
And going and gone," said he.
The people cheered, but some of them cried,
"We do not quite understand.
What changed its worth?" Swift came the reply:
"The touch of the master's hand."


And many a man with life out of tune,
And battered and scarred with sin,
Is auctioned cheap to the thoughtless crowd
Much like the old violin.
A "mess of pottage," a glass of wine,
A game — and he travels on.
He is "going" once, and "going" twice,
He's "going" and almost "gone."
But the Master comes, and the foolish crowd
Never can quite understand
The worth of a soul and the change that's wrought
By the touch of the Master's hand.

- Myra Brooks Welch

Would that one could write this well.  Ah me !!

Tuesday, July 12, 2011

Paraprosdokian 2 :



                                   he's a plastic surgeon".

Friday, July 08, 2011

A Paraprosdokian:

?????    Blimey, a new word to me.

Apparently this is an example -


To steal ideas from one person is plagiarism;

To steal from many is research.
***

Does anyone have other examples ?