Saturday, September 03, 2011

Interesting Info. For Writers.


Obviously, I found this via the internet.
It makes interesting reading for writers -

HOW TO RAISE YOUR CHARACTERS ABOVE THE STATUS QUO                                        Page 1 of 7.
August 30, 2011 | Brian A. Klems |

You’ve sweated over your manuscript, crafted your characters, honed your story line, and rooted your novel in a location organic to and inseparable from your plot. Now, as you begin tweaking and revising your story, it’s the perfect time to take a closer look at the depth and dimensionality of your characters.
One of the most effective ways of doing this is one most writers have never even heard of: managing status.
I first learned about status years ago while studying physical comedy, mime and improvisation. I remember listening to acting instructor Keith Johnstone (author of IMPRO and Impro for Storytellers) explain how dominance and submission affect actors on stage and how stillness raises status. As he spoke, I kept thinking of how essential it is for writers to capture the same characterizations on the page.Since then, I’ve been on the lookout for ways to fine-tune the status of my characters. Here are four essential principles I’ve discovered.
1. VARIABLE STATUS IS THE KEY TO DIMENSIONALITY.
So what exactly is status?
Simply put, in every social interaction, one person has (or attempts to have) more of a dominant role. Those in authority or those who want to exert authority use a collection of verbal and nonverbal cues to gain and maintain higher status. But it’s not just authority figures who do this. In daily life all of us are constantly adjusting and negotiating the amount of status we portray as we face different situations and interact with different people. Novelists have the daunting task of showing this dynamic of shifting submission and dominance through dialogue, posture, pauses, communication patterns, body language, action and inner dialogue. To do so, you’ll need to recognize some basic status cues:
Dominant individuals exude confidence through a relaxed demeanor and loose gestures and gait; submissive people constrict their stride, voice, posture, gestures.
Looking down, crossing your legs, biting your lip and holding your hands in front of your face are all ways of hiding. Concealment lowers status.
Eye contact is a powerful way of maintaining dominance. Cultures differ, but North Americans prolong eye contact to intimidate, control, threaten or seduce.
Stillness is power. Dominant people delay before replying to questions not because they can’t think of anything to say, but to control the conversation. They blink less frequently than submissive people and keep their heads still as they speak. The more fidgety, bedraggled or frazzled a person is, the less status he has.
Submissive people apologize and agree more than dominant ones. They try to please and are easily intimidated. To act as if you need something lowers your status; telling someone they can be helpful to you raises it.
Effective negotiators mirror the status of the people with whom they’re doing business. This way they neither appear too aggressive (intimidatingly high status) or too willing to compromise (unimpressively low status).
Status varies with respect to three things: relationship (a father has higher relational status than his 8-year-old), position (a boss has higher positional status than her employees) and situation (if you’re attacked by a team of ninjas and you’ve never studied martial arts, you’d have significantly lower situational status than your assailants).
Although the level of relational, positional and situational status might be out of our hands, our response to it is not. The daughter might manipulate her father, the employee might quit, and you might summon up enough moxie to frighten off those ninjas. So, in determining status, choices matter more than circumstances.When readers complain that a character is one-dimensional, flat or “cardboard,” they may not realize it, but they’re actually noting that the character—regardless of the social context in which she appears—always has the same degree of status.
She might always be angry or ruthless or heroic, but the more uniformly she responds to everyone and everything, the less interesting she’ll be.
People in real life are complex. Fictional characters need to be, as well.
So what’s the key to a well-rounded character? Simple: She doesn’t have the same status in every situation.
Each supporting cast member is in the story to bring out different traits of the main characters. Dimensionality, depth and complexity are all brought out by showing subtle shifts in your character’s status as he interacts with the other players.
In my novels featuring FBI Special Agent Patrick Bowers, I’m careful not to let him appear weak or cowardly: I want readers to respect and admire him. Whenever he’s at a crime scene or standing up to a bad guy, he has the highest status. He’ll never back down, never give in, never give up.
But to have dimensionality he also needs relationships in which he has low status. So, as a single dad he struggles with knowing how to handle his sharp-witted and surly teenage daughter, and, lacking some social graces, he fumbles for the right things to say to women he’s attracted to. Without his daughter or a love interest to reveal those low status aspects of his characterization, he’d be one-dimensional, and certainly not engaging enough to build a series around.
If you want readers to invest in your protagonist, you’ll need to find areas where he has a weakness, low status or something to overcome. Remember, even Indiana Jones is afraid of snakes, and Superman is vulnerable to Kryptonite.
2. WORD CHOICE DETERMINES CHARACTERIZATION.
In theater the phrase “stealing the scene” refers to instances in which another person upstages the star. Actually, it’s just another way of saying that the star (or protagonist) no longer has the highest status.
When this happens on stage, it will annoy the star. When it happens in your novel, it’ll turn off your readers.And you can shatter hundreds of pages of careful characterization with one poorly chosen word.
A person with high status might shout, holler, call or yell, but if she screams, screeches, bawls or squeals, her status is lowered. Similarly, a character who quivers, trembles, whines or pleads has lower status than one who tries to control the pain. For example:
1. Adrian drew the blade across Sylvia’s arm. She shrieked and begged him to stop.
2. Adrian drew the blade across Sylvia’s arm. She clenched her teeth, refused to give him the satisfaction of seeing her cry.
In the first example, Sylvia’s uncontrolled reaction lowers her status beneath that of her assailant. In the second, however, her resolve raises her status above that of Adrian, who has evidently failed to intimidate her.
Rather than appearing victimized, she has become heroic.
Your protagonist must never act in a way that lowers her status below that of the antagonist.
Take a moment to let that sink in.
You might find it helpful to imagine high-status movie stars playing your protagonist. I’m not sure about you, but I have a hard time imagining Liam Neeson, Jason Statham or Bruce Willis pleading for mercy or screaming for help.
Remember, choices determine status. So, while revising, continually ask yourself what you want readers to feel about each character. Do you want them to be on this character’s side? To cheer for him? Fear, despise or discount him? Every action, every word of dialogue, every gesture—even every speaker attribution—communicates a certain status, so be sure the words you choose support the impression you’re trying to make. If Betty stomps across the floor (showing lack of self-control) or struts across it (implying the need for attention) she’ll have lower status than someone who strides across it (showing composure and confidence).
Even punctuation affects status:

1. “I know you heard me! Move away from Anna! If you lay a hand on her, I guarantee you will regret it!”
2. “I know you heard me. Move away from Anna. If you lay a hand on her, I guarantee you will regret it.”
In the first example, the exclamation points cause the speaker to come across as frantic or desperate. In the second, the periods show him to be controlled, measured, authoritative. That’s how a hero responds.
A wimpy protagonist isn’t interesting.
A wimpy antagonist isn’t frightening.
In marketable fiction, both heroes and villains need high status. When villains aren’t frightening or heroes aren’t inspiring, it’s usually because the author let them act in a way that undermines their status. Don’t make that mistake.
3. PROTAGONISTS NEED OPPORTUNITIES TO BE HEROIC.
When I was writing my novel The Rook, one section gave me a particularly difficult time. Agent Bowers is at the scene of a suicide when Detective Dunn, a street-smart local homicide cop, shows up. Dunn is tough. He’s used to calling the shots, to having the highest status. In this scene, he makes an aggressive, high-status move by getting in Bowers’ face and then taunting him. I struggled with showing that as bold and brash as Dunn is, my hero still has higher status. After hashing through numerous drafts, here’s how the encounter finally played out (from Bowers’ point of view):
[Dunn] stepped close enough for me to smell his garlicky breath.
“This is my city. The next time you and your pencil-pushing lawyer buddies from Quantico decide to stick your nose into an ongoing investigation, at least have the courtesy to go through the proper channels.”
“I’d suggest you back away,” I said. “Now.”
He backed up slowly.
Bowers refuses to be baited and isn’t intimidated by Dunn’s aggressive posturing. If he were, readers would lose faith in him and side with Dunn. Instead, Bowers remains calm and, by exhibiting poise and self-control, induces Dunn’s submission. (Also, by adding the speaker attribution “I said,” I inserted a slight pause in Bowers’ response, subtly adding to his status even more. To see the difference, read the sentence aloud with and without the pause.)
At the end of the scene when Dunn steps back, there’s no doubt in the mind of the reader who is in charge.
Readers will not empathize with a weak protagonist. They expect protagonists who have strength of conviction, moral courage and noble aspirations. It’s true, of course, that during the story the protagonist might be struggling to grow in these areas, but readers need to see her as someone worth cheering for along the way.
If you can spot weaknesses in your protagonist and are grappling with how to strengthen her, try one of these ways:
Have your protagonist sacrifice for the good of others. The sacrifice might be physical (stepping in front of a bullet), financial (anonymously paying another’s debt), material (volunteering for the Peace Corps) or emotional (forgiving someone for a deep offense).
Have her stand up for the oppressed. I’ve seen all too many authors try to show how “tough” their protagonist is by portraying her as cold or unfeeling—especially at a crime scene. Bad idea. Readers want the hero (or heroine) to be compassionate and life-affirming. Let’s say your female medical examiner is at a crime scene and one of the other cops gestures toward the corpse and quips, “They stab ’em; you slab ’em.” Your protagonist needs to uphold the dignity and value of human life. She might reproach the cop, or remind him of the victim’s grieving family. If you let her make light of something as precious as life itself, you’ll end up devastating her status.
Have her turn the other cheek. If someone slaps your protagonist and she looks the guy in the eye and refuses to fight back, her self-control raises her status above that of the attacker.

Strength isn’t shown only by what a person can do, but by what she could do but refrains from doing. Self-restraint always raises status.
4. STATUS CRYSTALLIZES AS THE STORY ESCALATES.
As your story builds toward its climax, the status of both your hero and your villain will also rise. The bad guy will become more and more coldhearted or unstoppable, and the good guy will need to summon unprecedented strength or courage to save the day.
Status has more to do with actions than motives, so even though the hero and villain have completely different agendas, you can raise the status of either one by giving him more 1) self-control, 2) courage and/or 3) resolve.
Remember, stillness is power, so if you decide you need to make a villain more imposing, try slowing him down. Show readers that he’s in no hurry to commit his evil deed—he has such high status that he can walk slowly and still catch the person fleeing frantically through the woods.
Villains become less frightening when they’re self-congratulatory or cocky. You actually lower a villain’s status by giving him the need to prove himself. Sadistic, chortling, hand-wringing villains aren’t nearly as unnerving as calm, relentless ones who are simply indifferent to the suffering of others.
If your story calls for multiple villains, try staggering their status levels so that the top-tier bad guy has the highest status and is therefore the most threatening and dangerous person for your protagonist to encounter at the story’s climax.
Let your protagonist enter the final showdown at a disadvantage—weaponless, injured, poisoned or exhausted from fighting his way past all the antagonist’s henchmen. An underdog who overcomes impossible odds is a hero we can believe in.
And one we will want to read about again.

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Hopefully, it was useful reading.
Jim.

Thursday, August 18, 2011

WooHoo


Some mighty words of encouragement to their members from a 'sister' Writing Group, just over the mountains -

' WooHoo!
 Rousing cheers and applause goes to local illustrator Freya Blackwood for her win today in the Children's Book Council of Australia Awards for Early Childhood Book of the Year! 
Freya won for her illustrations in the book Maudie and Bear written by Jan Ormerod.
The two honour books in the Early Childhood section were The Tall Man and Twelve Babies by Tom Niland Champion and Kilmeny Niland with illustrations by Deborah Niland; and Look See, Look at Me by Leonie Norrington and illustrated by Dee Huxley.
We have the shortlisted books on display at Orange City Library and you can also check out book reviews by the Library team who have enjoyed reading the shortlisted books over the past month.
 Way to go Freya! '

Wednesday, August 17, 2011

UK Publisher.

Lucky me, my poem - Tibooburra, when it's hot - has been selected for inclusion in Everflowing Ink, a special edition soft back scheduled for publication 31st October this year.

The following is an excerpt from the website -
' Forward Poetry's ethos has always been to act as a bridge to publication rather than a barrier. 
This, along with our passion for poetry and creative writing, has seen a humble family business evolve into the biggest publisher of new poetry in the world. 
We understand that poetry is subjective, that everyone writes in a different style and that what one person can love, another can hate! 
Our collections showcase a variety of themes, writing styles and poets from all walks of life. 
They are carefully edited and compiled to celebrate and complement the craft that all of our contributors enjoy poetry.'


Should members need to investigate potential publication, use these details -

Email: inbox@forwardpoetry.co.uk. Office hours: 8am to 5pm Monday to Friday Remus House, Coltsfoot Drive, Peterborough, Cambridgeshire, PE2 9BF ...
www.forwardpoetry.co.uk

"Happy Hunting"
Jim.

Tuesday, August 02, 2011

Poddy Rider.


He'd set his sights on victory. Nothing was going to hold him back.
11-year old Ryan Fogarty from Anningie station went to the Harts Range rodeo (out around the Alice) over the weekend determined to become the 2011 poddy ride champion.
Say G'day to Ryan -

Poddy Rider.
 Anningie Station.
Now - young Ryan Fogarty is only eleven years old,
he sure has joined, the brave and the bold
by riding a calf, alone and not held,
his poddy riding prowess into history - will meld.
His style is just classical - and is sure smiled upon,
‘put left in the rope, right hand up, slope forward - hold on’
then cling like the devil to the poddy calfs back
for a second or more – of courage - no lack.

First prize is a buckle, which young Ryan has won,
riding a small bucking beast  on a day in the sun.
The sun shines on champions, that’s fact and it’s true,
he stuck to his task like sitting in glue,
squeezing his legs, listening to Dad,
prepared to be led
‘hold him real hard son,  and follow his head’.

Ryan intends to buy a big belt
for wearing his
Prize Buckle
here, there,
- everywhere -
so his friends and neighbours
- everyone -
will stop, stand and just stare.
So will
 Cameron Smith,
that famous bull rider,
maybe one day
 Ryan
will be his offsider.
©.Rimeriter. 2/8/11.
NB: sent by ABC Inmail.

Tuesday, July 26, 2011

Irish Pub.

Donnybrook Hotel.

They’d meet by flickering firelight in an Irishmans hotel
enjoy some finest whisky and very fine food as well
but often tempers rise up, as they would dance and play
just saying  “good evenin” could cause an all in one affray.

A frenzied fracas might ensue if the tone was quiet and wry
especially if a stranger caught a keen young colleens eye
took her to the parlour where he’d steal a fervent kiss
to a wild and riotous Irishman this was definitely amiss.

Fey leprechauns and fireflies would in the dark, appear
to keep an unfriendly stranger from coming much to near
they’d dance upon the toadstools and the velvet black of night 
and not go to the garden, there to steal a fervent kiss
from a wild young Irish colleen that could fill his life with bliss.

But then the total stranger did eagerly declare -
I have no need for colleens. I only need your fare.
I must drink and dine with kinship that take me to their breast.
I must full enjoy companionship, before I travel further west. 
My heart is, with the green of Ireland and in its stoney shores,
it dwells in old Killarney where my soul it still implores.

But Nay! they would have none of it, the leprechauns agreed.
They led him to the front step and wished him all good speed
whilst fireflies lit the pathway, to guide his wavering feet
that stumbled slowly down the path, albeit not too fleet.

Because he’d spied that Irish colleen, with fiery blood red hair,
waiting in the shadows with just enough time to spare, 
for only one more fleeting kiss and a touch of derring-dare.

©.Rimeriter.
31/3/04.


This ol' Pub exists near Lithgow in NSW.
The Portland Poet would know it well.

Friday, July 15, 2011

Masters Hand.

'Twas battered and scarred, and the auctioneer
Thought it scarcely worth his while
To waste much time on the old violin,
But held it up with a smile.
"What am I bidden, good folks," he cried,
"Who'll start the bidding for me?"
"A dollar, a dollar;" then, "Two!" "Only two?
Two dollars, and who'll make it three?"
"Three dollars, once; three dollars, twice;
Going for three…" But no,
From the room, far back, a grey-haired man
Came forward and picked up the bow;
Then, wiping the dust from the old violin,
And tightening the loosened strings,
He played a melody pure and sweet,
As a caroling angel sings.

The music ceased, and the auctioneer,
With a voice that was quiet and low,
Said: "What am I bid for the old violin?"
And he held it up with the bow.
"A thousand dollars, and who'll make it two?
Two thousand! And who'll make it three?
Three thousand, once; three thousand, twice,
And going and gone," said he.
The people cheered, but some of them cried,
"We do not quite understand.
What changed its worth?" Swift came the reply:
"The touch of the master's hand."


And many a man with life out of tune,
And battered and scarred with sin,
Is auctioned cheap to the thoughtless crowd
Much like the old violin.
A "mess of pottage," a glass of wine,
A game — and he travels on.
He is "going" once, and "going" twice,
He's "going" and almost "gone."
But the Master comes, and the foolish crowd
Never can quite understand
The worth of a soul and the change that's wrought
By the touch of the Master's hand.

- Myra Brooks Welch

Would that one could write this well.  Ah me !!

Tuesday, July 12, 2011

Paraprosdokian 2 :



                                   he's a plastic surgeon".

Friday, July 08, 2011

A Paraprosdokian:

?????    Blimey, a new word to me.

Apparently this is an example -


To steal ideas from one person is plagiarism;

To steal from many is research.
***

Does anyone have other examples ?

Sunday, June 05, 2011

Maggin' with Macca.

Just had me first bite of toast this morning while listenin' to Macca, 
(You know, Australia all Over, ABC Radio every Sunday morning), 
when suddenly he says - 
'here's a little poem written by Jim Spain - then he read it.

Lucky I was up in time because the programme starts real early and it was around seven thirty then.
It's just a simple little piece, but topical to Maccas interests -

Trekin’ across the Tanami, hundreds of kilometres to go,
trundle ‘n along in me wheelchair,
crikey the time passes slow.

Hardly stirrin’ the red dust, tyre tracks left far behind,
can’t see sign of a next bend, watchin’ the scenery unwind.
Amblin’ along towards Alice, that dusty desert town,
starin’ into the sunset sets me face in a frown

Spinifex keepin’ me company all alongside the track,
but  lookin’ ahead to the horizon
makes me stop lookin’ back.
©. Rimeriter.
4/6/11.

Blimey, I've got a real big head now and a puffed out chest.



Saturday, June 04, 2011

Posting Conflict.

I realised earlier today that I had been posting to Blogger of late, not to my Blogspot.

Can someone advise me of a simple way to either transfer or duplicate from one to the other??

Wednesday, May 25, 2011

Jim's Jottings: 2011 Prime Minister's Literary Awards

2011 Prime Minister's Literary Awards


Are you on the list ?       Did you enter ?
No, and neither did I.      Start preparing for next year !!
*****
Shortlists announced
Arts Minister Simon Crean has announced the 20 great Australian titles that have made it onto the 2011 Prime Minister's Literary Awards shortlists.
Minister Crean said being shortlisted for the Prime Minister's Literary Awards is a great achievement for authors that will bring further public recognition of their writing.
The judging panels were enormously impressed by the breadth of talent displayed in this year's entries, and applauded the inventiveness, artistry and flair for which Australian creators and publishers are justly renowned.
Non-fiction shortlist
Sydney, Delia Falconer
How To Make Gravy, Paul Kelly
The Party, Richard McGregor
The Hard Light of Day, Rod Moss
Claude Levi-Strauss: The Poet in the Laboratory, Patrick Wilcken
Fiction shortlist
Traitor, Stephen Daisley
Notorious, Roberta Lowing
When Colts Ran, Roger McDonald
Glissando, David Musgrave
That Deadman Dance, Kim Scott
Young adult fiction shortlist
Good Oil, Laura Buzo
Graffiti Moon, Cath Crowley
The Three Loves of Persimmon, Cassandra Gold
About a Girl, Joanne Horniman
The Piper's Son, Melina Marchetta
Children's fiction shortlist
Why I Love Australia, Bronwyn Bancroft
Flyaway, Lucy Christopher
Now, Morris Gleitzman
April Underhill, Tooth Fairy, Bob Graham
Shake a Leg, Boori Monty Pryor and Jan Ormerod

More information about the shortlists is available from

Tuesday, May 24, 2011

Writing Australia.

This item may be of interest to many -


Writing Australia.
Writing Australia is based in Canberra and aims to bring together the current five state funded writers' centres to deliver services for all writers on a national level.
Hear all about it on the Book Show:
the writers circle
the retreat
wiki based discussion spot
website coming

Saturday, April 23, 2011

Simple Sonnet.

"Crikey",
I learned about a 'sonnet competition' which closes 30/4. The subject is topical, it is the forthcoming royal wedding. I have decided to 'give it a go'
A sonnet structure is as follows -

The Petrarchan sonnet, also known as the Italian sonnet, originated in Italy in the 13th Century and was associated with the Italian poet Francesco Petrarch.
In its basic definition, a sonnet is a rhyming poem of fourteen lines with ten syllables per line, generally written in iambic pentameter meaning there is the rhythm ti-tum; ti-tum; ti-tum. Although there are many different varieties, the two most common variations of sonnets are; the English sonnet- popularised by William Shakespeare, and the Italian sonnet - or the Petrarchan sonnet as it’s commonly known as due to the first major practitioner Francesco Petrarch. In this workshop we focus on the Petrarchan sonnet (the Shakesperean Sonnet is featured separately).
It is a sonnet in its classic form and tends to split into two sections, known as octave (eight-lined stanza) and sestet (six-lined stanza). The octave has two quatrains, rhyming a-b-b-a, a-b-b-a; the first quatrain presents the theme, the second develops it. The sestet is built on two or three different rhymes, arranged either c-d-e-c-d-e or c-d-c-d-c-d or c-d-e-d-c-e; the first three lines reflect on the theme and the last three lines bring the whole poem to a close.
"Blimey", Composing a sonnet is not all that easy,(ti-tum; ti-tum; ti-tum) but after three revisions, following feed back from one of our esteemed NWG members, maybe I will have an entry ready in time !!!
Should YOU want to have a go, email me for the details.